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Date: Wed, 1 Apr 2020 15:34:43 -0500
From: Eric Wong <e@yhbt.net>
To: Kyle Meyer <kyle@kyleam.com>
Cc: meta@public-inbox.org
Subject: Re: [PATCH 1/2] README: expand on the GUI non-requirement
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Kyle Meyer <kyle@kyleam.com> wrote:
> Eric Wong <e@yhbt.net> writes:
> 
> > diff --git a/README b/README
> > index a3c1e61c..b90a5298 100644
> > --- a/README
> > +++ b/README
> > @@ -14,7 +14,8 @@ public-inbox spawned around three main ideas:
> >    use of non-Free services or software.
> >  
> >  * Graphical user interfaces should not be required for text-based
> > -  communication.
> > +  communication, users may have broken graphics drivers, limited
> > +  eyesight, or unable to afford modern hardware.
> 
> This run-on sentence tripped me up.  For clarity, perhaps add "as" or
> something similar before "users"?

Thanks and good point about the run-on sentence.

"as" could work, I think, the sentence may just be too long.
Perhaps just a separate sentence:

	"communication.  Users ..."

Thoughts?

I find it hard to notice my own grammar and speling errors,
so these fixes are very much appreciated :>