Heyo,

Nicolas Graves via Guix-patches via 写道：
> +(define-public passage

Thanks!

Most points below can be fixed up by a committer, including the 
description, but those tend to sound better when written by an 
actual user.  If you'd like to give it a try.

> +    (build-system copy-build-system)
> +    (propagated-inputs
> +     (list util-linux git qrencode sed tree age))

Super-nitpick: inputs conventionally hang out a bit lower, under 
the arguments field.

> +    (build-system copy-build-system)

Duped.

> +    (arguments
> +     '(#:phases (modify-phases %standard-phases
> +                  (add-after 'unpack 'rename-exe

s/exe/script/ (or sure, executable).

> +                    (lambda _
> +                      (rename-file "src/password-store.sh"
> +                                   "src/passage"))))
> +       #:install-plan
> +       (list '("src/passage" "/bin/")
> +             '("src/completion/pass.bash-completion"
> +               "/share/bash-completion/completions/")

OK, I've been looking at this for an embarrasingly long time 
trying to figure out what you're trying to communicate with '(… 
(list '(…))).  It seems very deliberate.  Any hints?  :-p

> +    (home-page "https://github.com/FiloSottile/passage")
> +    (synopsis "A fork of the password-store encrypted password 
> manager")

Another nitpic^Wcool tip: @command{} & friends work here just as 
well as in the description.  There's no difference.

The text should describe the package, not its ancestry.

> +    (description "This package provides a fork of the 
> @code{password-store}
> +encrypted password manager.  It relies on @code{age} instead of
> +@code{gnupg}.")

Same here.  I know all of these words but what do they mean?

> +    (license license:gpl2+)))

Checked.

> +
>  (define-public pass-otp
>    (package
>      (name "pass-otp")

> I've made the choice to rename the existing passage game to
> passage-game in a first commit, I hope it's OK. 

No, I don't think it is.  Adding this script need not affect other 
packages.

Kind regards,

T G-R