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Resent-From: Tobias Geerinckx-Rice Original-Sender: "Debbugs-submit" Resent-CC: guix-patches@gnu.org Resent-Date: Sat, 25 Jul 2020 18:46:02 +0000 Resent-Message-ID: Resent-Sender: help-debbugs@gnu.org X-GNU-PR-Message: followup 42516 X-GNU-PR-Package: guix-patches X-GNU-PR-Keywords: patch To: Brett Gilio Cc: 42516@debbugs.gnu.org Received: via spool by 42516-submit@debbugs.gnu.org id=B42516.1595702747950 (code B ref 42516); Sat, 25 Jul 2020 18:46:02 +0000 Received: (at 42516) by debbugs.gnu.org; 25 Jul 2020 18:45:47 +0000 Received: from localhost ([127.0.0.1]:51130 helo=debbugs.gnu.org) by debbugs.gnu.org with esmtp (Exim 4.84_2) (envelope-from ) id 1jzPB5-0000FG-20 for submit@debbugs.gnu.org; Sat, 25 Jul 2020 14:45:47 -0400 Received: from tobias.gr ([80.241.217.52]:53600) by debbugs.gnu.org with esmtp (Exim 4.84_2) (envelope-from ) id 1jzPB3-0000F6-9N for 42516@debbugs.gnu.org; Sat, 25 Jul 2020 14:45:46 -0400 Received: by tobias.gr (OpenSMTPD) with ESMTP id 977f6add; Sat, 25 Jul 2020 18:45:59 +0000 (UTC) DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed; d=tobias.gr; h=from:to:cc :subject:references:in-reply-to:date:message-id:mime-version :content-type; s=2018; i=me@tobias.gr; bh=m2jYgtZJmGO+uWhxydyHMV Hm58vRmMrMWtsF+l4xcs4=; b=H963dwwfgr+11usj/Opy8pnQ3VJqaHWaz+MWyB 1rvlPrSpA4VcCDOAB4mSHlerfdI7S8H7fEYKl2NoVxc7uOpGCAw8vuMxQIV0ol7H hUgo6KFDxH4ej/7ycjgm5jfXCUmYHAnVeD6RBmNjzBVFd28jDSPEnuzqbZCcHL4k CK53jy3mCLhcbSME4U5jNourHS9ziOb/mumAZkuaAewiu9NdeVgN7OAMe9IsFc5O Vm++XW2OEt/Ar1068oiDz6Hlpr3SQDKDDUcoZby/C8I3res0F8sUVPNsoq0LvPS6 Xl03GimCSIGCE+kKVqLhWS6YoLhIZM010LHpaWks0JDL0sAg== Received: by submission.tobias.gr (OpenSMTPD) with ESMTPSA id bd65168a (TLSv1.2:ECDHE-RSA-AES256-GCM-SHA384:256:NO); Sat, 25 Jul 2020 18:45:58 +0000 (UTC) BIMI-Selector: v=BIMI1; s=default; References: <20200724104307.30992-1-me@tobias.gr> <871rl0frpo.fsf@gnu.org> In-reply-to: <871rl0frpo.fsf@gnu.org> Date: Sat, 25 Jul 2020 20:45:43 +0200 Message-ID: <87imebe8mg.fsf@nckx> MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: multipart/signed; boundary="=-=-="; micalg=pgp-sha512; protocol="application/pgp-signature" X-Spam-Score: -2.3 (--) X-BeenThere: debbugs-submit@debbugs.gnu.org X-Mailman-Version: 2.1.18 Precedence: list X-Spam-Score: -3.3 (---) X-BeenThere: guix-patches@gnu.org List-Id: List-Unsubscribe: , List-Archive: List-Post: List-Help: List-Subscribe: , Errors-To: guix-patches-bounces+larch=yhetil.org@gnu.org Sender: "Guix-patches" Reply-to: Tobias Geerinckx-Rice , Tobias Geerinckx-Rice via Guix-patches From: Tobias Geerinckx-Rice via Guix-patches via X-Scanner: scn0 Authentication-Results: aspmx1.migadu.com; dkim=fail (rsa verify failed) header.d=tobias.gr header.s=2018 header.b=H963dwwf; dmarc=none; spf=pass (aspmx1.migadu.com: domain of guix-patches-bounces@gnu.org designates 209.51.188.17 as permitted sender) smtp.mailfrom=guix-patches-bounces@gnu.org X-Spam-Score: -1.61 X-TUID: nJZ3Fh8aCAgI --=-=-= Content-Type: text/plain; charset=utf-8; format=flowed Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable Brett, Brett Gilio =E5=86=99=E9=81=93=EF=BC=9A >> -The service type for the TLP tool. Its value should be a=20 >> valid >> -TLP configuration (see below). To use the default settings,=20 >> simply >> -write: >> +The service type for the TLP tool. The default settings are=20 >> optimised >> +for battery life on most systems, but you can tweak them to=20 >> your heart's >> +content by passing a valid @code{tlp-configuration} as its=20 >> value: [=E2=80=A6] > I would replace "as its value:" with "to the service type:", so=20 > it reads > "... but you can tweak them to your heart's content by passing a=20 > valid > tlp-configuration to the service type:" Ding. You picked up on the same niggle that bugged me =E2=80=94 both in=20 the original & here. I thought I'd just stared at it for too=20 long. =E2=80=98Value=E2=80=99 is a reference to the terminology used in (gnu serv= ices).=20 =E2=80=98To the service type=E2=80=99 sounds less accurate. I find the sen= tence=20 close to clunky is it is; what about a short and sweet: +The service type for the TLP tool. The default settings are=20 optimised +for battery life on most systems, but you can tweak them to your=20 heart's +content by adding a valid @code{tlp-configuration}: ^^^^^^ Now I've definitely stared at this for too long. How typical for=20 a prose patch :-) > Otherwise, it looks great to me! Thanks, T G-R --=-=-= Content-Type: application/pgp-signature; name="signature.asc" -----BEGIN PGP SIGNATURE----- iHUEARYKAB0WIQT12iAyS4c9C3o4dnINsP+IT1VteQUCXxx91wAKCRANsP+IT1Vt ecFcAQDR3nj7G+cR0A6w/NWQs86Lx1N/BEAZiYnX0Txg5UdszwD9HdvbEXyq+rPc +5FKrJWrGwWi2g1xcV7JwwLzNidiOAk= =MM8l -----END PGP SIGNATURE----- --=-=-=--