From mboxrd@z Thu Jan 1 00:00:00 1970 From: Nikita Karetnikov Subject: Re: Guix paper Date: Mon, 18 Mar 2013 07:48:25 +0400 Message-ID: <87r4jdv052.fsf@karetnikov.org> References: <87vc8ppry6.fsf@gnu.org> Mime-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: multipart/signed; boundary="=-=-="; micalg=pgp-sha1; protocol="application/pgp-signature" Return-path: Received: from eggs.gnu.org ([208.118.235.92]:49655) by lists.gnu.org with esmtp (Exim 4.71) (envelope-from ) id 1UHR1n-0002uj-Rz for bug-guix@gnu.org; Sun, 17 Mar 2013 23:46:30 -0400 Received: from Debian-exim by eggs.gnu.org with spam-scanned (Exim 4.71) (envelope-from ) id 1UHR1k-0004l2-SQ for bug-guix@gnu.org; Sun, 17 Mar 2013 23:46:27 -0400 In-Reply-To: <87vc8ppry6.fsf@gnu.org> ("Ludovic =?utf-8?Q?Court=C3=A8s=22'?= =?utf-8?Q?s?= message of "Sun, 17 Mar 2013 23:44:17 +0100") List-Id: Bug reports for GNU Guix List-Unsubscribe: , List-Archive: List-Post: List-Help: List-Subscribe: , Errors-To: bug-guix-bounces+gcggb-bug-guix=m.gmane.org@gnu.org Sender: bug-guix-bounces+gcggb-bug-guix=m.gmane.org@gnu.org To: Ludovic =?utf-8?Q?Court=C3=A8s?= Cc: bug-guix@gnu.org --=-=-= Content-Type: text/plain; charset=utf-8 Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable > Although I=E2=80=99m tired of writing right now, I welcome comments. :-) Nitpicking: 1. I think that it would be better to move the Background heading to the next page. Here is a possible solution: [1]. 2. This document has a lot of hyphenation problems: - the word "based" on the second page; - the word "bash" on the second figure; - (uri "mirror://gnu/hello/hello-2.7.tar.gz") on the fifth page; - "origin-" on the sixth page; - "parametrize" on the sixth page; - "expression->derivation-in-linux-vm" on the seventh page; - "corresponding" on the seventh page; - "build-bootstrap-guile.-sh" on the eighth page; - "build-expression->derivation" on the eighth page; - "GNU Guix" on the eighth page. Possible solutions: - the "microtype" package [2]; - use a single column instead of two; - the "hyphenation" command [3]. 3. Use the "hypcap" option [4]. 4. Typos: - "Two values are turned" (on the third page) should probably say: "Two values are returned." - "Allows for" (on the sixth page); "for" should be removed. - This one: "First, some GNU/Linux" (page 8) lacks the word "distributions." - "The" is probably missing here: "Ways to achieve this are known..." - Remove unnecessary spaces (page 10): "Store --- a system..." 5. Non-breaking space: [5]. Examples: - "Figure 4" on the sixth and seventh pages; - "Section 3.4" on the ninth page. 6. Maybe it would be better not to use underline on the third figure [6]. 7. I think that the word "hello" (on the third page) should be emphasized with the "texttt" command, not quotation marks. I also think that the comma should go before the closing quotation mark. But this rule depends on the dialect. [1] http://tex.stackexchange.com/questions/9576/how-to-avoid-heading-orphan [2] http://stackoverflow.com/questions/1609837/latex-breaking-up-too-many-w= ords [3] https://en.wikibooks.org/wiki/LaTeX/Text_Formatting#Hyphenation [4] https://en.wikibooks.org/wiki/LaTeX/Labels_and_Cross-referencing#Issues= _with_links_to_tables_and_figures_handled_by_hyperref [5] http://tex.stackexchange.com/questions/15547/when-should-i-use-non-brea= king-space [6] https://en.wikibooks.org/wiki/LaTeX/FAQ#Forget_about_bold_and_underline --=-=-= Content-Type: application/pgp-signature -----BEGIN PGP SIGNATURE----- Version: GnuPG v1.4.10 (GNU/Linux) iQIcBAEBAgAGBQJRRo6NAAoJEM+IQzI9IQ38shAQAJDOpuml+gb3UI08SBjXqw26 nCb9X0k8NaNDyFcBirtRSXhPFxfB9KoWrh9fHZOXQTfchO2esrX/Tjr3LwlDHk2Z uV9nNuE+EaKTtb4h3dhUCnzeTvJx2cmu7qH9wZTGDRLiKI+G1T5QUt6eCnCnrXo1 Qu/GAaQ97YSlniRLinhgoNMhvgSKGA+GPP1TY7akqhLEunpSwTDnbE/RKyhXRcS5 euBuRxwUnzuOMYrYs+HkXGoMOsYq8dNVZcGklwRlh04hIoZDcXSdWHlfYe0Qpk5K 8PaUXUP/e0YdJB6vkkjh4JcovUyYUPrnidVtLeE0LulLNyBFHcgvV7TrzoJujpBE nBX+7x+FyCdaC8Lrj2j9rJwAAg9BKK8nc0ALmSgMza+mjKcfI51kS5bJ90ffape2 Gm87Y0W1e2WhoeshVl9mGJVZgrKrj3k0V7icKyK841biVt5bjLb8xgtIxTbQDGRG P8uOxd++/0IFW6jKcwvxQ8GL8vP3GIyoc/4OM0z0eVUr3lrudGbUC0GuG4sftlrK 9p5D19N2koMHo0pTVMExAO8n9Or3FeqbySQgw4aH/5goXs8DiujUV4CdqaZD4hbw DLHpAm1jZP2UlwsvhJAPeQEUpkmv7NU/bpFztWSK/L7frYX9GSExQBcgS+T6Hx3x IUoqBNWflr1U8d2hekrP =vmih -----END PGP SIGNATURE----- --=-=-=--