On 26 Nov 2019, at 20:16, Eli Zaretskii <eliz@gnu.org> wrote:
> 
> I suggest "with Mercurial", not "on Mercurial".
> 
> Two spaces between sentences, please.
> 
> "when you invoke 'C-x v m'"
> 
> "when it prompts for a revision"

All issues are fixed. Please see updated patch.